Rewrite some Articles for me

Hi, I have a "SOAP OPERA SERIES" that is already written, so i need some editing so its more drama and exciting to read. Its in the earning money onlie niche. The text is about me and my pain, and success since i started my journey. Its 5 chapters that is supose to be send to my subscribers. Its important that its the end of every mail the reader is hungry after opening next days email. The 5 chapters is: Please see the instructions from my mentor: email 1. Intro - Strong hookChapter 1: Intro Chapter 2: Backstory to hitting insurmountable wall (open with high drama) Chapter 3: Epiphany that leads to big breakthrough Chapter 4: Hidden benefits of big breakthrough Chapter 5: Scarcity (tie is scarcity around bonus's) Writing a story is cool... But writing a story that actually sells... well that's why cooler. smile emoticon My mentor juust went through it the other night and he had following changes to what i hve written. PLease see his changes: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Edits to be done, plus more: First thing: Subjects. 2and 3 need work make them curiosity bproviking "it was at that moment I rwlised, I couldn't afgord my measly $192 rent bill" in chapter 2, get into pain more at the top "lost all contact" I Don't know what that means "lost all contact, evicted me from my apartment, and turned off my electricity" if know what that means. Haha also make the hooks better. W differnt subject lines, they'll natuallly be better... But also tell them what in it for them to read it "little did I know I was on the verge of my big breakthrough. A breakthrough that if you take and run with, WILL TRANSFORM YOUR BUSINESS". stay tuned... Also Your epiphany email needs to be a story that lead to the epiphany. "I was doing everything myself and faith miserably, until one day I caugt a break. I saw a post on facebook by a guy named misha... It was all about the power of systems, and what Syayems can do for you and your business". thats horrible, but just a rough draft off the top of my hwad dint just tell them what yiur robin any was bring them into your world and tell them what lead to the epiphany Include your bonuses in each of them also thwt should be something for you to chew on, Ya? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Pleas only show interest if you have the perfect skills to rewrite a already written text in the way thats decsribed in the chapters. I wnat to keep the most of whats written now, but i a way that fits to the chapters. I will attach the content to the people i find interesting to work more with. :) Best regards thomas